In the context of writing formal letters, usually it is required to mention person's credentials, e.g., their degree along with the dat on which the degree was conferred.
I was wondering if it would be OK if I wrote something with the format:
<'degree title'> conferred upon <'name'> by <'the dept., college, university'> on<'data of the award'>.
Is it too long for a formal letter? You might also need to add opening words, something like:
This is to further acknowledge that The College of Computer and Information Sciences at XYZ University conferred a Master of Science in Computer science upon Ms.Sara XYZ on 1st of July 2011.
Note: if the addressing language looks odd in the example, it is because the letter will be signed by the registration office.